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  • 8Romeo_Oxin

    khoảng 1 10 năm trước
  • em cần gấp. coi và sữa jùm em nha. coi có lỗi jì kô. nếu sữa câu jì thì để nó ở trong() sau cái câu cần sữa. Thank you Thank you Thank you


    Everyone are having their own memories, some are good and bad. To me that I can’t never forget about thing that happen to me when I was 6 years old. These memories are helping me be more understand to my mom, I may not understand it back then but now I understand more about it. Because she is so caring and hardworking to provide everything for my future.
    I remember one time that she help me with a class project. When I came home, I come to my mom and ask my mom to help me because I didn’t know what to do. She told me to read to her about the instructions that I got from my teacher. She help me with writing, prepare and organize thing that necessary to use for the project. We started to wrtting, then we took a rest, ate dinner and relax for a bit. After dinner, we continue the project put on pictures to help other understand what I want to said. Then I felt asleep, I wake up the next morning and saw that my project been finish. My mom told me that when I went to sleep she help me finish the rest. I went to school and got a good grade on it. After school, I went straight to home to show to my mom about my project. I’m thank her for helping me with the project.
    I remember about her hardworking that she hurt herself but still continue to work so that she could pay for my tution for school. When she work her boss is happy about her. I remember that she open a clothing store, she and my dad were tailors. My mom work so hard that everyone in the neighborhood respect and trusted her. There was one time that she made a dress for a woman. During this time I stay at my aunt’s house, whom was a 1st grade teacher and was my teacher, for her to help me with my school. My mom told the lady that it probaly finish few days. When she started it, she even forgot to eat lunch. There were an incident happen when I was stay at my aunt house. She felt asleep when she use the sewing machine, her thumb accidently get into part where needle is and it go through her thumb. My dad had to take my mom to a local clinic so that they could fix her thumb. When she came home, she still working on the current dress so that she can finish in time to gave it to the woman. When the woman know about the incident, she told my mom that she is very graceful to do business with her. When I heard about this, I feel like want to cry out, even to this day whenever I think about it I still get the same feeling for what my mom is going through.
    Those are the memories that I can’t never forget. Those thing make me to remember what is my mom sacrifice over thing just to help me grow up to become a better person. For everytime I sit back and think about it. I feel so great to have a mom like her. It help me keep going forward and not to give up.

  • chutieuthichbeer

    khoảng 1 10 năm trước
  • trời ơi mới đọc có paragraph đầu thôi mà sai tum lum chóng mặt quá, sửa lổi chính tả của bài này chắc tới sáng mai quá thôi out cho đỡ khổ cái thân

  • mong trinh

    khoảng 1 10 năm trước
  • sorry , i cant help you, because it's wrong very much

    Romeo chịu khó đọc lại kỹ ok,chứ sữa ở đây luôn hơi bị mệt

  • chutieuthichbeer

    khoảng 1 10 năm trước
  • hình như romeo mới học tiếng anh nên sai lỗi cơ bản nhiều quá

  • 4 Beauty

    khoảng 1 10 năm trước
  • 8Romeo_Oxin wrote:em cần gấp. coi và sữa jùm em nha. coi có lỗi jì kô. nếu sữa câu jì thì để nó ở trong() sau cái câu cần sữa. Thank you Thank you Thank you


    Everyone are having their own memories, some are good and bad. To me [that](delete) I can’t never forget about the thing(s) that happen to me when I was 6 years old. The(o)se memories are helping me be more understand to my mom, I may not understand it back then but now I understand more about it. Because she is so caring and hardworking to provide everything for my future.
    I remember one time that she help me with a class project. When I came home, I come to my mom and ask my mom to help me because I didn’t know what to do. She told me to read to her about the instructions that I got from my teacher. She help me with writing, prepare and organize thing that necessary to use for the project. We started to wrtting, then we took a rest, ate dinner and relax for a bit. After dinner, we continue the project put on pictures to help other understand what I want to said. Then I felt asleep, I wake up the next morning and saw that my project been finish. My mom told me that when I went to sleep she help me finish the rest. I went to school and got a good grade on it. After school, I went straight to home to show to my mom about my project. I’m thank her for helping me with the project.
    I remember about her hardworking that she hurt herself but still continue to work so that she could pay for my tution for school. When she work her boss is happy about her. I remember that she open a clothing store, she and my dad were tailors. My mom work so hard that everyone in the neighborhood respect and trusted her. There was one time that she made a dress for a woman. During this time I stay at my aunt’s house, whom was a 1st grade teacher and was my teacher, for her to help me with my school. My mom told the lady that it probaly finish few days. When she started it, she even forgot to eat lunch. There were an incident happen when I was stay at my aunt house. She felt asleep when she use the sewing machine, her thumb accidently get into part where needle is and it go through her thumb. My dad had to take my mom to a local clinic so that they could fix her thumb. When she came home, she still working on the current dress so that she can finish in time to gave it to the woman. When the woman know about the incident, she told my mom that she is very graceful to do business with her. When I heard about this, I feel like want to cry out, even to this day whenever I think about it I still get the same feeling for what my mom is going through.
    Those are the memories that I can’t never forget. Those thing make me to remember what is my mom sacrifice over thing just to help me grow up to become a better person. For everytime I sit back and think about it. I feel so great to have a mom like her. It help me keep going forward and not to give up.




    omg ím so tired already Grin [/spoiler]

  • Lòng Trắc Ẩn

    khoảng 1 10 năm trước
  • Everyone is having his or her own memories, some are good and bad. To me [that](delete) I can’t never forget about the thing(s) that happened to me when I was 6 years old. The(o)se memories are helping me be more understand to my mom, I may not understand it back then but now I understand more about it. Because she is so caring and hardworking to provide everything for my future.
    I remember one time that she helped me with my class project. When I came home, I come to my mom and asked my mom to help me because I did not know what to do. She told me to read to her about the instructions that I got from my teacher. She helped me with writing, preparing and organizing things that are necessary to use for the project. We started to write, then we took a rest, ate dinner and relaxed for a bit. After dinner, we continued the project put on pictures to help other understand what I want to say. Then I felt asleep, I woke up in the next morning and saw that my project had been finished. My mom told me that when I went to sleep, she helped me to finish the rest. I went to school and got a good grade on it. After school, I went straight to home to show to my mom about my project. I thanked her for helping me with the project.
    I also remember about her hardworking that she hurted herself but still continued to work so that she could pay for my tuition for school. When she works, her boss is happy about her. I remember that she opened a clothing store, she and my dad were tailors. My mom has been working so hard that everyone in the neighborhood respected and trusted her. There was one time tat she made a dress for a woman. During this time, I stayed at my aunt’s house, whom was a 1st grade teacher and was my teacher, for her to help me with my school. My mom told the lady that it would be probaly finished in a few days. When she started it, she even forgot to eat lunch. There were an incident happened when I stayed at my aunt house. She felt asleep when she used the sewing machine, her thumb was accidently got into part where needle was and it went through her thumb. My dad had to take my mom to a local clinic so that they could fix her thumb. When she came home, she still working on the current dress so that she could finish it on time to gave it to the woman. When the woman knew about the incident, she told my mom that she was very grateful to do business with her. When I heard about this, I felt as I wanted to cry out, even to this day whenever I think about it, I still get the same feeling for what my mom is going through.
    Those are the memories that I can not never forget. Those thing make me to remember what my mom has the sacrifice over thing just to help me to grow up to become a better person. For everytime, I sit back and think about it. I feel so great to have a mom like her. She helps me to keep going forward and not to give up.





    :P ... Ken "sửa" đại đó nha ... Giggling

  • lisaluly

    khoảng 1 10 năm trước
  • 4 Beauty wrote:
    8Romeo_Oxin wrote:em cần gấp. coi và sữa jùm em nha. coi có lỗi jì kô. nếu sữa câu jì thì để nó ở trong() sau cái câu cần sữa. Thank you Thank you Thank you


    Everyone has their own memories, some are good and bad. To me [that](delete) I will never forget what happened to me when I was 6 years old. The(o)se memories help me to understand more about my mom, I might not understand it back then but now i can see how hard she tried to provide me a good life, she teaches me a lot of things, and i think that she is a greatest mother in the world.
    I remember one time that she helped me with a class project. When I got home from school, I went to my mom and asked her to help me because I didn’t know how to do it. She told me to read the instructions that I got from my teacher, then she helped me with writing, preparing and organizing things that are needed for the project. We started the writing, then we took a rest, had dinner, and relaxed for a bit. After dinner, we continued to finish the project , she told me to put some pictures on to illustrate some important things. Then I felt asleep, I woke up in the next morning, and saw that my project was finished. Even though my mom didn't say a word but i knew that she helped to finish the porject. I went to school and got a good grade on it. After school, I went straight to home to show to my mom about my project. I hugged her, and said thank to her for helping me . <i stop here...u guys help him tie^'p di nha>


    I always remember about her hardworking that she hurt herself but still continue to work so that she could pay for my tution for school. When she work her boss is happy about her. I remember that she open a clothing store, she and my dad were tailors. My mom work so hard that everyone in the neighborhood respect and trusted her. There was one time that she made a dress for a woman. During this time I stay at my aunt’s house, whom was a 1st grade teacher and was my teacher, for her to help me with my school. My mom told the lady that it probaly finish few days. When she started it, she even forgot to eat lunch. There were an incident happen when I was stay at my aunt house. She felt asleep when she use the sewing machine, her thumb accidently get into part where needle is and it go through her thumb. My dad had to take my mom to a local clinic so that they could fix her thumb. When she came home, she still working on the current dress so that she can finish in time to gave it to the woman. When the woman know about the incident, she told my mom that she is very graceful to do business with her. When I heard about this, I feel like want to cry out, even to this day whenever I think about it I still get the same feeling for what my mom is going through.
    Those are the memories that I can’t never forget. Those thing make me to remember what is my mom sacrifice over thing just to help me grow up to become a better person. For everytime I sit back and think about it. I feel so great to have a mom like her. It help me keep going forward and not to give up.




    omg ím so tired already Grin [/spoiler]



    có nhìu câu đọc không make sense zới hay repeat nên lisa sửa lại đôi chút...mọi nguời giúp 1 tay nào... Giggling

  • chutieuthichbeer

    khoảng 1 10 năm trước
  • "Everyone is having his or her own memories" mới đọc câu đầu của Ken là cảm thấy bài văn này không có được điểm cao rồi, chán quá nên chẳng muốn đọc tiếp làm gì, chutieu nói lời thật lòng Ken đừng buồn nha Grin

  • Lòng Trắc Ẩn

    khoảng 1 10 năm trước
  • hê hê, tại everyone là số ít nên không thể dùng their là số nhiều đuoc, Ken đuoc học vay nên viết thế thôi; có lẽ chú tiểu học lúc sĩn nên có ý khác không chừng :P

  • tieungocnu

    khoảng 1 10 năm trước
  • sao chutieu ko sửa câu dó cho mọi nguoi xem thử

  • chutieuthichbeer

    khoảng 1 10 năm trước
  • "Everyone is having his or her own memories" for academic writing viết như vầy đúng hơn và sẽ có điểm hơn là câu Ken viết "Everyone has his or her own memories" or ken cũng có thể dùng their in general "Everyone has their own memories" dùng "is having" trong trường hợp này không đúng.

  • Lòng Trắc Ẩn

    khoảng 1 10 năm trước
  • chú tiểu nói phải, dùng "has" thì đúng ... tại gì trong bài văn của người đó chia theo thì tiếp diễn nên Ken cũng để nguyên luôn; nhưng everyone mà sau đó dùng "their" để thay thế thì đó là ý tưởng lạ ... dù sao Ken cũng cam on chú tiểu góp ý :P

  • chutieuthichbeer

    khoảng 1 10 năm trước
  • đừng dùng "I can't never forget" nên dùng "I will not forget" or " I will never forget"sẽ hay và đúng hơn, trong academic writing đừng nên viết can't or won't mà nên viết cannot or will not. thât ra chutieu chỉ đọc có câu đầu thấy sai nên chán không đọc tiếp nên chỉ sửa nhiêu đó thôi hy vọng Ken đừng buồn chutieu Grin

  • chutieuthichbeer

    khoảng 1 10 năm trước
  • KenTucKy_Usa wrote:chú tiểu nói phải, dùng "has" thì đúng ... tại gì trong bài văn của người đó chia theo thì tiếp diễn nên Ken cũng để nguyên luôn; nhưng everyone mà sau đó dùng "their" để thay thế thì đó là ý tưởng lạ ... dù sao Ken cũng cam on chú tiểu góp ý :P


    khi chutieu viết essay or research paper chutieu vẫn dùng their in general for everyone vẫn không bị trừ điểm nhưng chutieu ít dùng nó lắm vì viết như vậy cảm thấy bài văn không được hay

  • Lòng Trắc Ẩn

    khoảng 1 10 năm trước
  • hế hế, đâu có sao, chú tiểu sửa đúng thì Ken học hỏi, mai mốt viết luận sẽ áp dụng vào ... Laugh of loud


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